Tuesday, 17 December 2013

Backing up: How to deal with infodump

My first round of revisions has revealed (apart from my penchant for alliteration) that I have two pages of really tight, good writing...that can only be described as the dreaded infodump.

I wrote these two pages during the plotting of my book. They were to be integral to the development of MC's character. But now that my book is complete? Not so much.

So what to do? Most of the advice I've been given is to try and thread the backstory through-out the story, but this particular bit is not conducive to this. So now what?

I did a bit of scouting on the Web to see of I could come up with any other ideas, and found the following five tips the most insightful and useful:

1. From Paula Fleming at writing-world.com
Too much background? Do the Q&A test. A test to find out if you've put too much data in the story is to read it yourself and, paragraph by paragraph, underline any background information and write in the margin what question it's intended to answer.

From this tip, I identified two paragraphs that didn't really add anything to the plot. *delete*

2. From Erik Wecks at LitReactor
The more your information dumps relate directly to a story element currently at play in your narrative, the easier it is to hold an audience's attention. In other words, if you want to wander off on tangents, more power to you, but make sure your tangents are interesting to other people, not just yourself.

This was an 'aha' moment for me. Because these pages were written at an early stage in the process, they had become very personal to me. Which is fine if I'm writing them for me. Which I'm not. So exactly how interesting are they to my audience? I still feel there is some worth, but probably not the whole two pages. But what if I don't want to let it go?

3. From Brian W Forster
If you want to infodump, you need to follow the following decision making process:
1. Determine if the reader absolutely needs the information. I can almost guarantee you think they need more than they actually do.
2. Try to work the information into a tension-filled scene within the POV character’s perspective that advances the story.
3. If you meet 1 and can’t accomplish 2, then you’re forced to infodump. Be as concise as possible and pull out all the stops to make it entertaining. Remember no one cares as much about your backstory and world as you do.

By the time I read number 1, I realized that I didn't need number 2. My reader doesn't absolutely need the info. I might. But they don't. (But I filed number 3 - very useful tip for future infodumps.)

4. Lorraine Mace and her shared post on Critiques, Reviews and Writing  Characters should be just like the people you meet. You have to get to know them by their actions and dialogue. If they speak for themselves, readers will believe in them and follow wherever they go. If the author speaks for them, that connection is broken.

Yes! I've found an out! My infodump - ahem, very useful backstory - is told in my MC's voice. Her interpretation of events adds to our knowledge of her family and her personality. I'm saved! I'm saved! 

Ok, not quite. I can't get sentimental over this. I know that some of it must go...
 
5. From Janice Hardy at The Other Side of the Story
The easiest way to fix it is to cut it, but that's not always feasible. But it's a good first step, so try cutting it and reading the page or scene. If it reads fine without the infodump, leave it out. Be ruthless. Unless it's very obvious that missing information makes the scene confusing or impossible to understand, don't put it back in. Authors often think readers need more than they really do to get what's going on.

Yes, I know cutting is the obvious thing to do. I just needed someone else to tell me. *sob*  

QUESTION: How do you deal with infodump? Do you find it hard to let go?

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